the danger of the ineffective protagonist (sigh)

Just finished Chapter 7 of The Harvest (not really, this was posted with a time machine) and I’m not satisfied with Dr. Zorgone. I like what I chose to do with General Phorott thus far, but Dr. Zorgone needs to be someone the audience really hates and wants to see dead. I just don’t know how to do that yet.

So far, all he’s done is be funny, casually kill minions, and insult Quinn. And it might be easy to make him hated simply because he insulted Quinn — except I haven’t done much to make the audience pity Quinn in the first place.

Thus, the villain is ineffective because the protagonist is ineffective.

The solution to this problem is obviously to go back to earlier chapters and make the audience a) like Quinn and b) pity her.

To be honest, I don’t think I’ve ever been good at doing this. But I guess now’s no better time to try. There were many opportunities for me to make the audience pity Quinn. I just need to go back and utilize them.

Right now I’m at page 196. Almost 200 pages so halfway there! Just like in my last update, Varzo — a minor character — is still more interesting than Quinn, the fucking protagonist. All of Varzo’s chapters are engaging (at least I find them engaging to write) while in comparison, all Quinn’s chapters boil down to her and Thalcu, her love interest, getting to know each other and in turn allowing the audience to know them. Their half of the story is getting into trouble while Varzo’s half is coming to rescue them.

I dunno. I think I need to take a break, but the workaholic in me wants to go back to earlier chapters and make Quinn more sympathetic.

Just one more hour and then I will rest. Just one more . . .